Game with Porter Words + Pictures SUK3.1C Hendrik

Summary Critique SUK3 Part3 Henry Briscoe

Hello the author of the following article! ;-)

I really like this summary. It seems to me that all key points are clearly stated. The beginning and the ending are concise and hit the nail on the head. Moreover, the text is coherent and lots of linking words are used. 

SUMMARY OF EUROPE ALREADY HAS ONE FOOT IN 

“JAPANESE“ DEFLATION GRAVE

Ambrose Evans-Pritchard, in The Telegraph of October 23, 2013 discusses the problem of Europe’s deflation crisis. 

Evans-Prichard states that deflation makes debt worse and that it is extremely dangerous if debt surpasses 300% of GDP, which is currently the problem in Western Europe. Although inflation could solve this dilemma, it is an impossible approach to stop deflation because inflation isalready too low and plummeted to 0.9% in the euro zone. 

Consequently, debt ratios are irrupting and the risk of runaway debt, which primarily affects Italy and Spain, is increasing. Italy, for example, has two options to solve the problem of runaway debt; either to pay 6.3% towards debt or accept a massive unemployment rate. 

Moreover, private debt is also affected by deflation and therefore even Germany is at risk. 

According to Evans-Pritchard, there are only two possible solutions to the problem. Either France, Italy, Spain and the Club Med advise the EBC to implement a relation policy; or Europe waits for the salvation of a global growth, which is highly unlikely to set in. 

As the title indicates, Europe is in a highly problematic situation which could lead to a policy crisis comparable to the one in Japan. 

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I think that the author has done a good job! :-)

What I Learned (cohesion, articles etc.) SUK3.1C Hendrik

Here is the analysis of the mistakes in the Mr Bower Letter

I have read a lot about cohesion and what I have realised is that though some linking devices could seem similar in meaning, the difference is vital and cannot be neglected. The following links were really helpful for me: http://library.bcu.ac.uk/learner/writingguides/1.33.htm (Cohesion: Linking Words and Phrases), http://www.carmenlu.com/fifth/writing/linkers_6.pdf (Writing and Speaking: Linking Words and Phrases) and http://www.dcielts.com/ielts-writing/cohesion-and-avoiding-repetition/ (Cohesion and Avoiding Repetition).

First, I was really confused with the meaning and usage of the word ‘besides’. I thought it could be used to show the transition to a new point; in fact, it denotes reinforcement. So I decided to change ‘besides’ with ‘now’ since the latter means representing of a new idea.

Second, twice I started the sentences with the word ‘And’. I need to be more careful and to avoid that mistake next time. In the first sentence I decided to omit ‘And’ and in the second I substituted it with ‘So’.

Third, I have written the word ‘internet’ without the article ‘the’. While reading several articles I discovered some interesting things about the capitalization of this word as well. Here are the links I referred to: http://www.noslangues-ourlanguages.gc.ca/bien-well/fra-eng/typographie-typography/internet-eng.html (Internet: capitalized or not?) and http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Capitalization_of_%22Internet%22 (Capitalisation of ‘Internet’).

Furthermore, I finished the letter with the phrase ‘Yours faithfully’. I should have written ‘Yours sincerely’ since the name of the recipient is familiar to me. Here is the link: http://speakspeak.com/resources/general-english-vocabulary/business-letter-writing-phrases (Business letter writing phrases).

Finally, shame on me for writing ‘to the greatest extenD’ instead of ‘to the greatest extenT’ and no excuse for not putting the titles of the books and series in inverted comas.

To conclude, I have realized that I need to pay special attention to the meaning of the linking words and phrases and to use them appropriately.